Wednesday, November 22, 2006

For all ye poem lovers

Ok so i tried changing me style of poetry a bit and it got mixed responses some likey's and some not so much's so here give it a read:

IT

I took a peek, that was all it took to set me free.
Nothing special, just a simple, innocent glance.

It towered over me..
No not 'it', for 'it' is way to cold for such a divine creation.
Neither he nor she for both way too flawed for 'it'
So for now lets use 'it', for no word is pure enough for me to brand 'it' with.

Create a word?! Oh how absurd to think us humble beings can overcome the pressure of creating a word great enough for 'it'.
Only a GOD is capable of such a thing.

PRAY? What world do you live in? Im no buddah to restrict my myself in a prayer hoping for enlightenment.

So for now, namless 'it' shall stay. But i sure hope that one day, you may be lucky enough to say, " 'it' set me free ".


16 comments:

No3iK said...

oooooooofffffffff

ma9araat !!

heheh shot gun yoba :p

No3iK said...

ok man
ur soooo climbing up a new level here

i not only likey but lovey

i read it three times because i melt everytime i reach the last line..

it is beautiful.

Yazeed said...

oh come on!
first no3ik
then u!

um-miT3ib said...

mafahamt shay 3ade;p?

do0da said...

no3ik: Tx =D inshala more to come .. mo akeed bes inshala =P

Yazeed: im assuming we're talkin about the poem writing :P i was bullied into it i swear =P

um-mit3ib: =P 3adi im still not sure what i was on when i wrote it =P

Danah said...

I liked this one more than the om 3ali one:P

Merci for the questionnaire thingie!

Dakhtour said...

Shino No3ik 3adetek?!

Anyway it's a gift in the end and seems that u have it too ;)

Anonymous said...

do0da!? 6ala3t sha3ir min ta7at le ta7at? ;P Yah yah shal 7arakat. I really liked it. La2 9ij shay 3ajeeb.

Let "it" be your inspiration. ;)

ScarlO said...

Sweet :-D
'it' could be a green apple or a plate of balalee6, though.
Lovely, though. Pretty Shakespearean, what with the rhetorical questions and all.
You can tell heather would hate this comment, right? erm, because I'm trying to sound smart and what not? Okay shutting up ..
:-D

Reem said...

heeeeeeeey!! 7di dasha eb qowa!! mashallah mashallah! it is amazing!! indeed what is coming is smth unnamable, smth that challanges everything we had taken for granted.. smth new!! wooow i loved it!!
"But i sure hope that one day, you may be lucky enough to say, " 'it' set me free ".
beautiful line!! absolutely!!
keep it up man!!
im really impressed :D

Anonymous said...

u rightin poems too?
sum ppl r havin lots of coffee 2day breakin rules n sayin its stress n what hav u. i can do the beatin for u. but quit wrightin & stop doin this 2 urself; try salsa dancin or make porn films instead

F. said...

9a7 lsaaanik!


really good!

do0da said...

dandoon: id hardly call the um3ali one a good poem :P

zizo: LOL wala 3ad it was her idea to post a poem :P oo thx for the compliment

CeCe: LOL madri 3ad itha id call myself a sha3ir bes i glad you think its gr8 =)

Deem: lol thanks

Scarlo: LOL yes it could be it could be =P a plate of balalee6 is definitley something that would inspire me to write a piece like this =P

3ad ana wain o a3arif ina its a bit shakespearean =P

Reem: Thanks =P wala 3ad ana mo ma5ith wayid 3ala writing poems bain fatra o fatra i come up with something =P bes yala inshala il keep it up =)

heath: lol i was bullied into posting this really. Hm salsa dancing you say? Well ima need a partner like you for that wont i ?

Aurora: Thaanks =)

Cr8ivia said...

ya salaaam :P

nice nice

um-miT3ib said...

iktib feeny shi3ir;p

do0da said...

Cr8ivia: Thanks =)

um-mit3ib: Awal shay post again o i9eer 5air :P