Now that thats outta the way another point to clearout is, THIS POEM IS NOT ABOUT ME, ive been goin thru some sorta writers block for awhile and i came up with this in my history class it wasn't much at the begining of the class but come the end of class it looked pretty good and me likes it =).
Ive showed this to a couple of people already and even though one was close the other was way off so i decided not to post the actuall poem thinkin no1s gonna get what its about and if they dont then i may have been to vague bes i like the way it is and making it clearer would ruin it. So why am i posting? well me friend told me, "after you write something its no longer yours, its for people to intrepet" so here's the poem..
In Pursuit of Happiness
I long to feel a nothingness inside,
yet such a wish ive always been denied.
Only in its coldness do i find my comfort,
and only in its darkness do i feel alive.
This graceful act wont betray me,
only this act can bring me back my smile.
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Can you tell me what you think the guy in the poem is talking about? I'll edit and explain it in a weeks time.
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UPDATE
ok so a lil about the poem
The poem is a bout a guy whos given up on the world o kil ma feeha, hes depressed and he found his way out through this act which for him is the key to all his problems this act being...suicide.
26 comments:
shot gun baby ;)
ummmmmmmmmmmmmmm
well i didnt see the movie yet
but dr.lost calls it gay :p
so go figure heheheheh
anywhooooooooooooo
im not allowed to tell what i think coz u already told me whats it about.
but i think im at least allowed to say what i thought it was about?
if not, i just simply think its beautfuly written. and ur writing is maturing alot! mashalah :*
goooooood work 7ason!
ok,
i thought it was about beingn alone.
and wanting to be alone. lonelyness a bless.
andi also thoguht it was about u :p hehehehehehe
He wants to be nothing and disappear from this world?
he feels empty
i donno
bas i understand him
ummmmm ya7lailik ;p i never would imagine something so sensitive coming out of u !:P
well said i must add ;p
tawaqo3aty ou ta7leelaty tgool ina il guy ili bil poem.. ymoot 3al ga3da alone ;p ou hes more comfortable when theres nothing on his mind " nothingness".. ou its his way of feeling his own happiness..
7ekam smila 3alai!
allaaaah 7abait that movie! ey3aqed;*
please don't rite poems ana ma afham ;/
ktbt then deleted my explination:p yalla tell us what's it about !
iktib shi3ir feeny plz ;p
"only in its darkness do i feel alive" WOW!!
It's like the story of ma life!
no3ik: LOL aku shay he doesnt consider gay :P shofay that movie was good bes the ending was weak.
CeCe: very close bes missing a key word bout it.
Zalabya: yea close bes nafs cece missing pretty much the one word im looking for :p
omtantoo7: LOL you knw ur not the first one to tell me that :P ull find his own way find happiness when i explain it :P
utmost: lol inshala acouple more days o il put it up.
um-mit3ib: loll intay kil matshofeen shi3ir tabeen one for you 5ala9 you can have the next one i wrote one 3an sleep :P bes it can be said about ne thing really fa 5aleeha 7agich :P
Blasha: id be worried if your thinking of doing what this guy is asking for =/
Hello!! Mashallah great job!! It’s is sooo beautiful!!
Well well, I think that she/he needs to be left alone, to have some time off to think of nothing.. also he needs to do smthing, an “act” to be liberated or to reach “it”, a place or whatever “it”is…
Bs 3ad shno hal act.. hmmm madri, I need to spend more time with the poem :D
Bs 9ij 9ij GREAT job sweets..
Keep up the amazing work.. I loved it so much! I love the pic b3d, so dark and hmm 7elwa!
Good work...lovely poem :)
I think he's longing for something which he cannot obtain...something bad for him but he still wants it..
I cant quite put my finger on it though
Its a good poem though, and the picture matches it perfectly :)
i saw the movie ams il9ib7 and i liked it:p
hmm. a certain word came to mind bas mabi agool in case im waaay waaaaaaaay off:p
hahaha i got it right! smillah 3alai awal ma giraitah 3araft the word:p do0da gally not to say it 3ashan u keep guessing:p
Ya enta ya fanan ya mawhooooooob
Bo9 shooof... Do0da eb ye3ml aih ;)
Kalaaam keeebeeeeeeeeeeeeer
I can't see anything in the poem but the feeling of Happiness!!!
Elmohem,,, impressive words dooda ;)
7asoon writing poems....u've been inspired by No3ik...:)
Reem: thanks =) i was looking to see if some1 can guess what that act was bes my sis finally did :P
aurora: Thanks =) well im bout to put up whats it bout =)
dandoon: FINALLY SOME1 GOT IT !
Zizo: *dances to tune* laish wagafat kamil :P
Deem: LOL well a bit off bes ya3ni some may look at it that way i guess wait read the explanation and see what i mean.
Maze: shift shlown :P
heyyy!!
wallah 7sait eno suicide, bs qelt noooo to depressing!! 3ad i love depression in away :D bs mo suicide!!
great poem sweets!!
keep it going man!
ullaaaaah! my interpretation was WAY off :P i thought ina this is a guy wayed mathqoo6 min kil 9owb (family, work, etc.. ) o yabeela a couple of days off where he doesnt think about anything, ya3ni iyroo7la cham yowm to chalet, mazra3a watever wyrid :p
weh allahuma ya kafi !!!
laiish il ka'aaba laiiSh !!
goola khal ifaker bel mawthoo3 wesali rak3etain ;p
smila 3alai smila 3alai kil shay agoola 9a7 !:P il rayal mat ou sheba3 moot wintaw ba3adkom t7aliloon
that was touchy
Lol 6ala3 3ax ma gehamt :P
I'm zero bel poetry ma3 enni darsa literature bs I was dayman avoiding poetry questions :P
Good one ya shaaaaaaaaaaaaa3er ya entaaaaaaaa ya kbeeeeeer ;)
reem: thanks =) 3ad i dunno why i thought of suicide bes gilt if it will break my writers block then il go ahead and write it :P
Elaine-ess: LOL tigdreen tgoleen mathqoo6 bes bidal shalaih yabi jihanam :P
um-mid3aab: kalamata igol yabi ilink o he'll think about it :P
omtantoo7: LOLL heyy shfeeha if they wana leave comments :r
Zalabya: tx
deem: LOL yea you were off bes ya3ni tigdreen tgoleen his happiness was in his death fa far7an :P
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